# Overall 
In these sections, the parameters for the simulation, model estimation procedures, and loss funcions are explained. I think this a very clear section which certainly gets the point across. The main thing I ran accross and wanted to suggest was to make it clear what each particular paragraph is doing in order to set the reader expectations. That way, it would allow you to ease the reader into the technical details which need to be presented, as the reader will be mentally prepared to read them. Other than that, I have a few topic/stress position suggestions, but this looks great. 

# Specific Notes 

3.1, P1: "Our goal" could be revised to "Our goal in this section". That way, readers will know the scope of this particular goal, as opposed to wondering whether this is the goal of the entire paper or just this section. 

It may also help to explain that in this section, you will first describe the choices of parameters and performance criterion, as you explain above. This way, the reader will have an idea of what is happening in each of the subsections. 

3.1.1, P1:
I think this should either link back to the previous section, or have an introduction sentence in this one explaining: "In this paragraph, we will outline the parameters used in our simulation study" That way the reader will have the high level idea in mind and know what/why you are explaining this. 

3.1.1, P2: I think this can be merged with the preceding paragraph, since we are introducing the idea of "surveying the literature" twice. This would help your goal of creating a more concise section. 

3.1.1, P4: I was unfamiliar with the concept of a "tie" between nodes, but mabe this was defined in a previous section.

3.1.1: Overall, I think this section could be reorganized to first give the reader a high level idea of what is going on, and then get into the specifics when necessary. For instance, it seems the overall goal here is to explain the four different choices you made in determining the data parameters. If you explain this goal at the outset, and which four parameters you are explaining, I think the reader will have an easier time understanding the section. 

3.1.2: The main goal of this section is to introduce the models we are using, the way we are estimating parameters, and how well they deal with missing data

3.1.2, P1: Here I think is makes sense to switch the "similar to Chen and Lei" out of the stress position, in favor of the "spectral clustering on the adjacency matrix". 

3.2, P1: Switching sentence one and two here would help, since sentence two describes the high level goal, whereas sentence one gets a bit more specific. It could help here to list the three criteria in the first paragraph, that way when you discuss them in detail later the reader will be better equipped to link back to these sections. 

3.2, P2: It was a bit hard to decipher here that this paragraph was explaining the second model selection criteria, which was said near the end of the paragraph. However, the explanation of why you need it in the opening sentences is very good and clear. To combat this, you may want to insert a "Next, we look into the quality of clock memberships". Finally, I think it would make sence to add NMI to the stress position here, since it's a new subject which has a lot of significance down the road. 

3.2, Final paragraph: It seems here that you're summarizing now these three performance criterion you have explained in the section, however this wasn't immediately clear until I re-read the sections. It would help here to link the name of the loss functions in the topic positions of each one of the sentences, that way the reader will know where to refer back to, and will immediately notice what the goal of this paragraph is. 

3.2, Final Paragraph: What is "infomap"? This could be a situation as discussed in LeBrun where the information may be contained elsewhere, but it could help to refer to it here more specifically. 

In the end, it's interesting that you stated the hypothesis of what you would expect going into the next section, which is a good idea to keep the reader interested leading into this.